Time : 2021-02-07 22:16:30
Điểm: 6/10
Most of companies always aim at increasing the quality and lowering cost price for their products in order to meet all demands of consumers and keep business developing. However, it is not easy for companies to reach this target then diversifying product categories is applied.
As we know, the product quality has built many the well-known brand name in the world then companies should focus on manufacturing the high quality products with the using time long. Most of consumers wish to own the high quality products especial consumer products like clothes, shoes… from famous brands because of convenience, comfortableness beside the sophistication of these products sometimes enhances the value of the user. Besides that, the high quality products maybe save more than products bought at cheap price because of the using time longer and consumers will not feel bored even after a long time to use it. Moreover, the high quality goods mostly are friendly with environment and regard to user’s health than low quality products such as the 3M face mask must protect people from bacterial better than normal mask.
However, others believe that companies should aim to cheap products then they can often change and replace old things by new goods fashionably. Nowadays the product diversification about quantity and variety has attracted consumers then they willingly replace items in use by other goods in fashion that will cause of waste for society as these items will be thrown away even they are still good in using. On other hand, the products at cheap price will be suitable with all consumers then they can decide what kind of products need to buy. In my opinion, companies should diversify products in order to meet the consumers’ demands especially consume goods. And, depend on kind of goods people can choose the high quality or cheap products.
In conclusion, all people prefer the high quality goods to cheap products but just few of them can afford to own high quality things then companies need to diversify their products in order to make advantaged conditions for all consumers.

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Most of companies always aim at increasing the quality and lowering cost price for their products in order to meet all demands of consumers and keep business developing. However, it is not easy for companies to reach this target then diversifying product categories is applied.
As we know, the product quality has built many the well-known brand name dùng many + danh từ số nhiều chứ không dùng many + với mạo từ in the world then companies should focus on manufacturing the high quality products with the using time long. Most of consumers wish to own the high quality products especial consumer products like clothes, shoes… from famous brands because of convenience, comfortableness beside the sophistication of these products sometimes enhances the value of the user dùng cụm danh từ, chú ý tương quan khi dùng dạng liệt kê. Besides that, the high quality products maybe save dùng từ diễn đạt more than products bought at cheap price because of the longer (tính từ trước danh từ khi dùng cụm danh từ) using time longer and consumers will not feel bored even after a long time to use it. Moreover, the high quality goods mostly are trạng từ đứng sau tobe friendly with environment and regard to không dùng động từ sau tobe user’s health than low quality products such as the 3M face mask must protect people from bacterial better than normal mask. không dùng such as trước mệnh đề, có thể tách ý dùng for example, for instance
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In conclusion, all people prefer the high quality goods to cheap products but just few of them can afford to own high quality things, so then companies need to diversify their products in order to make advantaged conditions for all consumers.

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Điểm: 6.5