Time : 2021-03-09 22:23:33
Điểm: 6/10
Many people acknowledge that their lifes will surely be humdrum if they lack sports because they are in their blood. Therefore, they do not hesitate doing any things including risky sports at all costs to satisfy their vehement passion. Besides some up sides, this brings about loads of down sides, which makes people opine that so-called soprts such as mountain climbing and sky diving should be prohibited. For my money, I absolutely oppose this viewpoint.
On the one hand, some schools of thoughts believe that doing dangerous sports will invole elements of risks bereaving of their life. To illustrate, we cannot forget Russia’s Dyatlov Pass Incident happened in 1959 that cause horrific death to nine thickly-experienced climbers just in one night but scientists have ever found out the reasons up to now.
On the other hand, that the government prevent people from doing dangerous sports is disagreed for some following reaons. First and foremost, this violates their freedom and democracy because they cannot gauge their true potentials, break the records and have brillian & breathtaking performances. Actually, everyone on the Earth is thirst for being well – known and appreciated as they have resplendernt accomplishments. Hence, forcing the world of sports not to do threatening games is a big barrier with them. Moreover, risk – takers are aware of the possible harzards and undergo an extreme trainning as well as ensure enough safety equipment so the situation they are put in jeopardy is pretty rare. To go in detail, before experiencing rock climbing, they practice a lot of technique such as using backpacks and mountaineering sticks, practicing endurance and spirit, etc.
In a nutshell, although doing dangerous sports poses a big threat to someone’s life, we cannot forbid them quit their passion. Risk – takers should ensure their security by following all precautions and useful tools so that they are not likely to be got severely injured and killed.

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Many people acknowledge that their lifes lives will surely be humdrum if they lack sports because they are in their blood diễn đạt thái quá. Therefore, they do not hesitate doing any things including risky sports at all costs to satisfy their vehement passion. Besides some up sides, this brings about loads of down sides, which makes people opine that so-called extreme soprts chính tả such as mountain climbing and sky diving should be prohibited. For my money, I absolutely oppose this viewpoint.
On the one hand, some schools of thoughts believe that doing dangerous sports will invole chính tả elements of risks bereaving of their life danh từ số nhiều. To illustrate, we cannot forget Russia’s Dyatlov Pass Incident happened in 1959 that cause horrific death to nine thickly-experienced climbers just in one night but scientists have ever found out the reasons up to now. dẫn chứng này không support chủ điểm của bạn ở trên
On the other hand, that the government prevent people from doing dangerous sports is disagreed nội động từ không dùng thể bị động for some following reaons. First and foremost, this violates their freedom and democracy because they cannot gauge their true potentials, break the records and have brillian & breathtaking performances. Actually, everyone on the Earth is thirst for being well – known thông tin này không chính xác and appreciated as they have resplendernt accomplishments. Hence, forcing the world of sports not to do threatening dangerous games is a big barrier with them. Moreover, risk – takers are aware of the possible harzards and undergo an extreme trainning as well as ensure enough safety equipment, so the situation they are put in jeopardy is pretty rare. To go in detail, before experiencing rock climbing, they practice a lot of technique such as using backpacks and mountaineering sticks, practicing endurance and spirit, etc.
In a nutshell, although doing dangerous sports poses a big threat to someone’s life, we cannot forbid them to quit their passion. Risk – takers should ensure their security by following all precautions and useful tools so that they are not likely to be got chủ động severely injured and killed.

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