Time : 2021-05-17 10:40:43
Điểm: 8/10
In the past few years, a large amount of money has been utilized by governments for celebrating nationwide holidays and festivals. Besides, there is mounting concern that it is a waste of money to pay for these celebrations. Personally, while I agree that celebrating holidays and festivals is a necessity, I believe that governments should spend money on many other vital problems.

On the one hand, there are some merits thanks to the celebration of holidays and festivals. First and foremost, celebrating festivals will establish the specific characteristics of a country. A holiday or festival is endemic of a particular country; thus, whenever you make a reference to that country, you will think of that. Secondly, the celebration of festivals promotes the relationship among human beings. Festivals will create an opportunity for humans to share their feelings as well as to exchange their thoughts.

On the other hand, investing much money in celebrating festivals may be a waste. In reality, there are a wide variety of problems that governments must cope with for the time being. Firstly, governments must face up to the field of education. Many children nowadays cannot go to school because of their poverty. Additionally, more money should be invested for raising children’s awareness about every aspect of their lives. Secondly, governments must put emphasis on the field of health, especially during the coronavirus is raging on a national scale. Many people are on the danger list and they need medicines, vaccines, operations, and treatments to defeat their ailments.

In conclusion, it is fruitful to invest money in the celebrations of festivals and holidays, whereas many other important problems must be dealt with. Therefore, not only do governments need to appreciate celebrating festivals and holidays, but they also need to place emphasis on health and education.

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In the past few years, a large amount of money has been utilized by governments for celebrating nationwide holidays and festivals. Besides, there is mounting concern that it is a waste of money to pay for these celebrations. Personally, while I agree that celebrating holidays and festivals is a necessity, I believe that governments should spend money on many other vital problems.

On the one hand, there are some merits thanks to the celebration of holidays and festivals. First and foremost, celebrating festivals will establish the specific characteristics of a country. A holiday or festival is endemic of a particular country; thus, whenever you make a reference to that country, you will think of that. Secondly, the celebration of festivals promotes the relationship among human beings. Festivals will create an opportunity for humans to share their feelings as well as to exchange their thoughts.

On the other hand, investing much money in celebrating festivals may be a waste. In reality, there are is a wide variety of problems that governments must cope with for the time being. Firstly, governments must face up to the field of education. Many children nowadays cannot go to school because of their poverty. Additionally, more money should be invested for in raising children’s awareness about every aspect of their lives. Secondly, governments must put emphasis on the field of health, especially during when the coronavirus is raging on a national scale. Many people are on the danger list and they need medicines, vaccines, operations, and treatments to defeat their ailments.

In conclusion, it is fruitful to invest money in the celebrations of festivals and holidays, whereas many other important problems must be dealt with. Therefore, not only do governments need to appreciate celebrating festivals and holidays, but they also need to place emphasis on health and education.

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