Time : 2021-06-08 17:30:12
Điểm: 7/10
In the past few years, our environment has to suffer lots of dreadful influences that people all around the world caused. Many causes harm the environment like factories, constructions, and most importantly, transportations. Although most people are aware of this issue, they still continue doing it. In this essay, I will point out some reasons for this problem and give several solutions to solve this.
These days, we can easily see a large number of motorbikes and cars on the streets while public transports like buses, trains are fewer. Perhaps many people found that automobiles, motorcycles are more convenient than those public transports. You do not need to walk to the nearest station just for a ride, you do not need to book tickets or make sure that you are right on time. Also, it might be crowded and noisy on public transports. This problem bothers lots of people, which is why they do not like riding on those trains, subways. Not to mention, you can travel anywhere you want without suffering those problems above.
Asides from those advantages, cars and motorcycles are really harmful to the planet since they release toxic gases ( carbon dioxide, sulfur dioxide, etc ) into the air. These gases might destroy the Ozone layers. Without the protection of these layers, the Earth would be heated up and cause a major climate change. If people keep using these for the next few years, the environment would be harmed awfully. Moreover, people might get some dangerous respiratory-related diseases. Their lungs can be destructed if they have to face these gases regularly.
It is important to reduce the numbers of automobiles and motorbikes. I believe that the numbers would be decreased if we do propaganda to everyone and explain the bad effects that these vehicles cause. When people are fully aware of this, they will stop using these transports. Also, we can encourage others to ride bicycles instead. Bicycle is an environment-friendly transport, it does not cause any harm and it can help people exercise, which is good for their health.
I hope that these solutions can help our environment so that our generations can have a good life without having any problems related to the planet.

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In the past few years, our environment has to suffer lots of dreadful influences that people all around the world have caused. Many causes factors harm the environment like factories, constructions, and most importantly, transportations. Although most people are aware of this issue, they still continue doing it. In this essay, I will point out some reasons for this problem and give several solutions to solve this.

These days, we can easily see a large number of motorbikes and cars on the streets while public transports like buses, trains are fewer. Perhaps many people found that automobiles, motorcycles are more convenient than those public transports. You do not need to walk to the nearest station just for a ride, you do not need to book tickets or make sure that you are right on time. Also, it might be crowded and noisy on public transports. This problem bothers lots of people, which is why they do not like riding traveling on those trains, subways. Not to mention, you can travel anywhere you want without suffering those problems above.

Asides from those advantages, cars and motorcycles are really harmful to the planet since they release toxic gases ( carbon dioxide, sulfur dioxide, etc ) into the air. These gases might destroy the Ozone layers. Without the protection of these layers, the Earth would be heated up and it will cause a major climate change. If people keep using these vehicles for the next few years, the environment would be harmed awfully. Moreover, people might get some dangerous respiratory-related diseases. Their lungs can be destructed if they have to face inhale these gases regularly.

It is important to reduce the numbers of automobiles and motorbikes. I believe that the numbers would be decreased if we do propaganda to everyone and explain the bad effects that these vehicles cause. When people are fully aware of this, they will stop using these transports. Also, we can encourage others to ride bicycles instead. Bicycle is an environment-friendly transport, it does not cause any harm and it can help people exercise, which is good for their health.

I hope that these solutions can help our environment so that our future generations can have a good life without having any problems related to pollution the planet.

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