Time : 2021-08-06 08:31:22
Điểm: 7/10
Dear Ms. Anne,

As a director, I am really sorry to hear that you will leave the company. Although I have heard of your decision in advance, when I receive this email, I still feel very sad.

First of all, I would like to thank you very much for your contribution to the company over the years. As an Account Excutive, you have fulfilled your responsibilities as well as shown your enthusiasm for the job. The company highly appreciates your ability and work spirit. Therefore, the company decided to give you an extra month's salary and a medal for this year's typical employee of the year.

Regarding the handover, all tasks and documents will be received by the deputy. I think 2 weeks is not enough for you to transit work, you should hand it over within 3-4 weeks to prevent problems arising later.

Your reason is to move to the South, I hope you can still keep in touch with me because I am not only your boss but also your friend. Hope you will have a good new life there.

Wishing you lots of luck!

Sincerely,

Don Cohen

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Dear Ms. Anne,

As a director, I am really sorry to hear that you will leave the company. Although I have heard of your decision in advance, when I receive this email, I still feel very sad.

First of all, I would like to thank you very much for your contribution to the company over the past six years chỉ rõ sự đóng góp đã được đề cập đến ở thư đề bài. As an Account Excutive, you have fulfilled your responsibilities as well as shown your enthusiasm for the job. The company highly appreciates your ability and work spirit. Therefore, the company decided to give you an extra month's salary and a medal for this year's typical employee of the year.

Regarding the handover, all tasks and documents will be received by the deputy. I think 2 weeks is not enough for you to transit work, you should hand it over within 3-4 weeks to prevent problems arising later.chỉ cần diễn đạt ý bạn sẽ bàn giao công việc lại trước thời gian bạn nghỉ

Your reason is to move to the South, I hope you can still keep in touch with me because I am not only your boss but also your friend. Hope you will have a good new life there.

Wishing you lots of luck!

Sincerely,

Don Cohen

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