Time : 2021-08-16 00:01:17
Điểm: 8/10
Dear Robin Singh,
Thank you for your letter that expressed your interest in my Japanese course. I am writing to give you the information that you asked for.
First of all, I am happy to know that Mr. Jonathon Kyle, who is your mentor, recommended my course to you. We are colleagues and close friends. He is such an excellent, enthusiastic and dedicated professor that not only his students but also his colleagues like and respect him a lot.
As I know, you want to learn Japanese to find a new job abroad, especially in Japan. Thus, this good target will help you motivate yourself to learn better. With ten years of experience of teaching Japanese, I am confident that my students can communicate well in basic topics after learning 4 months.
Thank you for your compliments about my method. In my opinion, the best way to learn Japanese is to make students feel interested in Japanese culture so they can learn quickly. Moreover, you want to be proficient in business communication in the Japanese language. Therefore, after learning basic Japanese course about 4 months, you should attend my business Japanese course in 3 months that you learn everything from conversations, presentations and so on. Then, you will feel confident to communicate with customers, bosses, colleagues and so on.
It’s very good for you to have a few friends in Japan with whom you can practice the language. We all know that practice makes perfect so if you learn with them, your Japanese will be better day by day.
My earliest basic Japanese class will open on 18th August, please go to the website learnjapanese.com to enroll in my class. Before joining the class, you should listen to some songs or short stories in Japanese to get used to the language. I hope you will study hard and become fluent in Japanese soon. If you have any questions, feel free to ask me.
Yours faithfully.
Mr.Haruki

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Dear Robin Singh,
Thank you for your letter that expressed your interest in my Japanese course. I am writing to give you the information that you asked for.
First of all, I am happy to know that Mr. Jonathon Kyle, who is your mentor, recommended my course to you. We are colleagues and close friends. He is such an excellent, enthusiastic and dedicated professor that not only his students but also his colleagues like and respect him bạn đã dùng đại từ quan hệ rồi, không dùng đại từ thay thế nữa a lot.
As I know, you want to learn Japanese to find a new job abroad, especially in Japan. Thus, this good target will help you motivate yourself to learn better. With ten years of experience of teaching Japanese, I am confident that my students can communicate well in basic topics after learning 4 months.
Thank you for your compliments about on my method. In my opinion, the best way to learn Japanese is to make students feel interested in Japanese culture so that (mệnh đề chỉ mục đích chứ không phải kết quả) they can learn quickly. Moreover, you want to be proficient in business communication in the Japanese language. Therefore, after learning basic Japanese course about 4 months, you should attend my business Japanese course in 3 months that you learn everything from about conversations, presentations and so on. Then, you will feel confident to communicate with your customers, bosses, colleagues and so on.
It’s không viết tắt trong thư formal very good for you to have a few friends in Japan with whom you can practice the language. We all know that practice makes perfect so if you learn with them, your Japanese will be better day by day.
My earliest basic Japanese class will open on 18th August, please go to the website learnjapanese.com to enroll in my class. Before joining the class, you should listen to some songs or short stories in Japanese to get used to the language. I hope you will study hard and become fluent in Japanese soon. If you have any questions, feel free to ask me.
Yours faithfully,.
Mr.Haruki

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Điểm: 7.5