Time : 2021-08-28 18:14:29
Điểm: 8/10

Dear Jack Dylan,
Thank you for your letter that explained why you could not make our appointment on Saturday.
Honestly, I was a little disappointed and unhappy because I was informed when I was on my way to your clinic. You were very punctual before so I wondered what happened. After understanding the reason behind that, I think that you did the right thing. I agree that doctors should always prioritize patients who are in critical situations. And I know that you are a really nice and dedicated doctor. Thus, I do not mind that you missed out my appointment and informed me late .
Due to the cancelation, I had to return home and could not check my broken arm on time. Therefore, I am quite worried about it. Although I feel hurt or something strange on my arm yet, I would like to have my arm checked as soon as possible. Because I need to be ready for my trip abroad next month, I want my arm to recover soon.
Thus, the new appointment that you gave me is on coming Thursday is quite late for me. I would like you to reschedule it for coming Monday or Tuesday in the afternoon. If you are unable to make it during work hours, I am happy to meet you after that time around 6:30 p.m.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Mr. Andrew

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Dear Jack Dylan,
Thank you for your letter, which (dùng mệnh đề quan hệ không xác định đứng sau danh từ có tính từ sở hữu your) that explained why you could not make our appointment on Saturday.
Honestly, I was a little disappointed and unhappy because I was informed when I was on my way to your clinic. You were very punctual before so I wondered what happened. After understanding the reason behind that, I think that you did the right thing. I agree that doctors should always prioritize patients who are in critical situations. And I know that you are a really nice and dedicated doctor. Thus, I do not mind that you missed out my appointment and informed me late .
Due to the cancelation, I had to return home and could not check my broken arm on time. Therefore, I am quite worried about it. Although I feel hurt or something strange on my arm yet, I would like to have my arm checked as soon as possible. Because I need to be ready for my trip abroad next month, I want my arm to recover soon.
Thus, the new appointment on coming Thursday that which you gave me is on coming Thursday is quite late for me. I would like you to reschedule it for on coming Monday or Tuesday in the afternoon. If you are unable to make it during work hours, I am happy to meet you after that time, at around 6:30 p.m.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Mr. Andrew

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