Time : 2021-10-26 22:16:39
Điểm: 8/10

Dear Jane,
I am so happy to receive your letter after a long time. John and I are doing well and we are so excited to hear about your business. I would like to congratulate you on your new shop.
I still remember you told me a lot about your big desire for silver jewelry on our last vacation. The handmade silver jewelry which you gifted me before I still use it. They are so beautiful and exotic. I am so glad to hear that your sales are going great and you are selling other handmade items too. Moreover, you want to create a website for your shop. That is a good idea because it will help your products approach more potential customers and they can find information easily. I am interested in creating the site for you. Using your souvenirs from your travels for your website is a good idea and I will try to bring the exotic feeling of the store to viewers as your requirement.
I understand that the products on your website need to be updated regularly and you can take their pictures by yourself. When you send me new photographs I will help you upload them. I am happy to know that you already bought a good camera and some studio equipment to make beautiful photos.
I will try my best to make your site vivid, attractive and exotic. I really hope that more customers will know about your shop and like it. You are my customer now so of course, I will charge you a reasonable price. Please give me more information and photos about your shop so I can start to design it soon.
Best wishes,
Evi

Nhận xét của giáo viên :

Dear Jane,
I am so happy to receive your letter after a long time. John and I are doing well and we are so excited to hear from you after a long time, since our last vacation (bổ sung ý để có sự phản hồi rõ ràng hơn) and know about your business. I would like to congratulate you on your new shop.
I still remember you told me a lot about your big desire for silver jewelry on our last vacation. I still use The handmade silver jewelry which you gifted me before I still use it (bạn đang diễn đạt câu fragment, chưa đầy đủ cấu trúc câu). They are câu trước bạn đang dùng danh từ số ít, sao lại thay thế bằng đại từ ngôi thứ ba số nhiều? so beautiful and exotic. I am so glad to hear that your sales are going great and you are selling other handmade items too. Moreover, you want to create a website for your shop. That is a good idea because it will help your products approach more potential customers and they can find information easily ý trước and đã thể hiện nội dung này rồi. I am interested in creating the site for you. Using your souvenirs from your travels for your website is a good idea and I will try to bring the exotic feeling of the store to viewers as your requirement.
I understand that the products on your website need to be updated regularly and you can take their pictures by yourself. When you send me new photographs I will help you upload them. I am happy to know that you already bought a good camera and some studio equipment to make beautiful photos.
I will try my best to make your site vivid, attractive and exotic. I really hope that more customers will know about your shop and like it. nên có sự chuyển ý, như about the charge,You are my customer now, so of course, I will charge you a reasonable price. Please give me more information and photos about your shop so I can start to design it soon.
Best wishes,
Evi

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