Time : 2015-12-25 13:16:19
Điểm: 8/10
Dear Alice,
I’m very happy to receive your letter. If only I could join your birthday party in your flowers garden and play games with you. It must be so exciting!
As well as you ^^ I have also been organized a birthday party at home by my parents but we just organize a small party ^^ There were 20 people coming to my birthday party including my family and my friends. My mother prepared very carefully for my birthday party.
On that day, my sister got the task to decorate. From balloons, flowers, lights,...until the banners, all looked so splendid. My mother bought a birthday cake for me and some gifts. And she cooked delicious food and bought a lot of candies, cookies, fruit.
I wore a yellow dress and a hairpin on my head. Everybody said that I'm very beautiful and pretty. I received lots of presents from my family and my friends. They looked very cute and nice. I enjoyed them so much.
During the party, we enjoyed the food, played some games and sing the songs together. All of us took lots of photos to keep those sweet moments.
When it was dark, all of my friends arrived their home. That was the most wonderful party I’ve had in my life.
I'm very glad and happy because everything my family and my friends did for me.
Write to me soon
Love,
Hai Anh






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Dear Alice,
I’m was very happy to receive your letter. If only I could join your birthday party in your flowers garden and play games with you. It must be so exciting!
As well as you ^^/Like you, I have also been organized a my birthday party was also organized at home by my parents but we just organized a small party/one ^^ There were 20 people coming to my birthday party including my family and my friends. My mother prepared very carefully for my birthday party.
On that day, my sister got the task to decorate undertook the task of decorating the party. From balloons, flowers, lights,...until to the banners, all looked so splendid. My mother bought a birthday cake for me and some gifts. And she cooked delicious food and bought a lot of candies, cookies, fruit.
I wore a yellow dress and a hairpin on my head. Everybody said that I'm I was/looked very beautiful and pretty. I received lots of presents from my family and my friends. They looked very cute and nice. I enjoyed them so much.
During the party, we enjoyed the food, played some games and sing the sang some songs together. All of us took lots of photos to keep those sweet moments.
When it was dark, all of my friends arrived their home. That was the most wonderful party I’ve had in my life.
I'm very glad and happy because with everything my family and my friends did for me.
Write to me soon.
Love,
Hai Anh

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