Time : 2016-01-04 21:08:10
Điểm: 9/10
Dear Alice,
Your birthday is very wonderful. Last year, I have a wonderful birthday party too. I will tell you about that birthday party.


On that day, my parents told me I can ask for them anything I want. And I told them that, I want to hold a birthday party with my friends.
On that afternoon, my mother took me to the supermarket. We bought many things, such as : Fruits, candies, cookies, candles, masks, cards,... My mother ordered a birthday cake. It was a beautiful and delicious cake. There was a little monkey on the cake. Then, we came home. My mother spend 4 hours cooking for the party. I hung the ballons on the TV, windows, door,... After that, I put the mask on the table so that my friends can wear it.


In the evening , all of my friends came to my birthday party. My house was filled with presents, flowers, cards, best wishes from my friends. I was very happy. We played, chatted and sang together. My father prepared many interesting games and we all enjoyed it. The most interesting game is hide-and-seek. And luckily, I was the winner.

When the end the party, I thought the time run so fast and I always hope it will be longer. After the party, I went to bed and I had a sweet dream. I hope my next birthday party will be more interesting.

That's all about my birthday party. I hope you stay to healthy and happy.
Best wishes
Thao

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Dear Alice,
Your birthday is was very wonderful. Last year, I have  had a wonderful birthday party too. I will tell you about that birthday party.


On that day, my parents told me that I can could ask them for them anything I want. And I told them that, I wanted to hold a birthday party with my friends.
On that afternoon, my mother took me to the supermarket. We bought many things, such as : ( sau such as không dùng dấu :) Fruits, candies, cookies, candles, masks, cards,... My mother ordered a birthday cake. It was a beautiful and delicious cake. There was a little monkey on the cake. Then, we came home. My mother spend 4 hours cooking for the party. I hung the ballons on the TV, windows, door,... After that, I put the mask on the table so that my friends can could wear it.


In the evening , all of my friends came to my birthday party. My house was filled with presents, flowers, cards, best wishes from my friends. I was very happy. We played, chatted and sang together. My father prepared many interesting games and we all enjoyed it. The most interesting game is was hide-and-seek. And luckily, I was the winner.

When At the end the party, I thought the time ran so fast and I always hoped it will would be longer. After the party, I went to bed and I had a sweet dream. I hope my next birthday party will be more interesting.

That's all about my birthday party. I hope you stay to healthy and happy.
Best wishes
Thao

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