Time : 2016-01-08 20:26:32
Điểm: 9/10
Dear Alice,

I am very happy to write to you again. As you said, I also want to tell you about my birthday party. My birthday is on September 16th so I celebrated my birthday party on September 16th.

My family helped me to hold a party at home. I invited many friends and we had a lot of fun. The party was very beautiful because I decorated it with many colorful lines of lights, rippons and balloons.

We enjoyed many special dishes and of course there is a birthday cake in my party. A candle bearing number 11 placed in the middle of the cake. My friends and my family were clapping their hands when I blew candle. They gave me a lot of great presents.

After that, we played many games together such as blind man’s buff, tug of war, ect. Everyone were very funny. We also sang many songs and listened to music.

At the end of the party, we took a lot of photos. After that, I opened presents. There were many things such as some comic books, a dictionary, clothes,...My mother gave me a nice watch.

I think it is a memorable party. Do you like my birthday party? I hope my next birthday you can come and enjoy my party . I'm looking forward to seeing you. Write to me soon!

Best wishes,

Minh

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Dear Alice,

I am very happy to write to you again. As you said Like you, I also want to tell you about my birthday party. My birthday is on September 16th so I celebrated my birthday party on September 16th.

My family helped me to hold a party at home. I invited many friends and we had a lot of fun. The party was very beautiful because I decorated it with many colorful lines of lights, rippons and balloons.

We enjoyed many special dishes and of course there is was a birthday cake in my party. A candle bearing number 11 was placed in the middle of the cake. My friends and my family were clapping their hands when I blew out the candle. They gave me a lot of great presents.

After that, we played many games together such as blind man’s buff, tug of war, ect. Everyone were very funny. We also sang many songs and listened to music.

At the end of the party, we took a lot of photos. After that, I opened presents. There were many things such as some comic books, a dictionary, clothes,...My mother gave me a nice watch.

I think it is a memorable party. Do you like my birthday party? I hope my next birthday you can come and enjoy my party . I'm looking forward to seeing you. Write to me soon!

Best wishes,

Minh

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