Time : 2015-12-25 14:03:09
Điểm: 8/10
Dear Alice,

First of all, I am very grateful that you sent a letter to me and shared your party with me. I am also sorry that I cannot attend your birthday party. But I promise that next birthday I will participate.

On this letter, I will share you about my birthday party, it was held last month. That day was a very happy day that I cannot forget.

My mother and father organized my birthday party in a big restaurant. They also invited a lot of guests: father's friends, mother's friends, my grandfather, my grandmother, my neighbors, my friends.. so they were very busy. Although they were busy, they prepared for the party very thoughtful and carefully. They booked lots of chairs and tables and the restaurant was decorated very luxurious with colorful balloons.

On that day, my mother gave me a new and beautiful bike. It was very beautiful and comfortable so I liked it. My father gave me a new dress which he bought two months ago. I liked it so I wore it on my birthday. After that, my friends and my relatives came to my birthday party. They gave me a lot of beautiful gifts and good wishes. I liked them and I was very happy and surprised.

Then, my mother, my father and I invited everyone to take part in my birthday party. We ate lots of delicious foods with many traditional foods like grilled chicken, grilled tilapia, chicken soup and desserts.. After that, my mother and father with their friends talked and chatted about something. They look very happily. My friends and I came to my garden and we played some interesting games. Then, we picked some flowers in my garden and wore them in hair. We looked like many princesses.

After that, everyone and I took lots of photos to make souvenirs for everyone. They looked very funny, excited and cute. Then, we said goodbye and the party ended. That day was a memorable party that I had.

I hope that next birthday you will participate in my party with me and my relatives. I'm looking forward to receiving a letter from you soon.

Best wishes,

Trang Nhu

Nhận xét của giáo viên :

Dear Alice,

First of all, I am very grateful that you sent a letter to me and shared your party with me. I am also sorry that I cannot could not attend your birthday party. But I promise that next birthday I will participate it.

On this letter, I will share tell you about my birthday party ( share sth with sb), it was held last month. That day was a very happy day that I cannot forget.

My mother and father ( my parents) organized my birthday party in a big restaurant. They also invited a lot of guests: my father's friends, mother's friends, my grandfather, my grandmother, my neighbors, my friends.. so they were very busy. Although they were busy, they prepared for the party very thoughtfully and carefully. They booked lots of chairs and tables and the restaurant was decorated very luxuriously with colorful balloons.

On that day, my mother gave me a new and beautiful bike. It was very beautiful and comfortable so I liked it. My father gave me a new dress which he bought two months ago. I liked it so I wore it on my birthday. After that, my friends and my relatives came to my birthday party. They gave me a lot of beautiful gifts and good wishes. I liked them and I was very happy and surprised.

Then, my mother, my father and I invited everyone to take part in my birthday party. We ate lots of delicious foods with many traditional foods/dishes like grilled chicken, grilled tilapia, chicken soup and desserts.. After that, my mother and father with their friends talked with their friends and they chatted about something. They looked very happily happy. My friends and I came left the restaurant and backed ( bữa tiệc đang được tổ chức ở nhà hàng) to my garden and we played some interesting games. Then, we picked some flowers in my garden and wore them in hair. We looked like many princesses.

After that, everyone and I took lots of photos to make as souvenirs for everyone. They looked very funny, excited and cute. Then, we said goodbye and the party ended. That day was a the most memorable party that I had.

I hope that next birthday you will participate in my party with me and my relatives. I'm looking forward to receiving a letter from you soon.

Best wishes,

Trang Nhu

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