Time : 2015-02-01 20:59:56
Điểm: 9/10
Dear Alice,
I am very well now but I must study hard because I'll have Math exam tomorrow Last week, I joined the wedding of my sister.
On that day, I wore the most beautiful dress. The wedding was held in the restaurant. On the roof, there was a luxury lamp. In front of me, there was a stage which there were many people performed on that. Around me, I can see many beautiful chairs, tables, dishes, classes and rose vases.
When my sister came downstair, the music was on. Somtime it was high but sometime it was low. When she met the groom, they promised that they'll live happily together, gave rings, pour the wine and cut the cake.
However, I was very excited when my sister blew her flowers into the air. Luckily, my mom got it. They came to my table and we cheered together. My dad also came to the stage to sing and dance.That was so fun! I really enjoyed it. Perhaps the letter is long and I must study now so we must say goodbye. Good night, Alice!
Best wishes,
Lizzy

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Dear Alice,
I am very well now but I must study hard because I'll have Math exam tomorrow Last week, I joined the wedding of my sister.
On that day, I wore the most beautiful dress. The wedding was held in the restaurant. On the roof, there was a luxury lamp. In front of me, there was a stage which there were many people performed on that. Around me, I can see many beautiful chairs, tables, dishes, classes and rose vases.
When my sister came downstairs, the music was on. Somtimes it was high but sometimes it was low. When she met the groom, they promised that they'll live happily together, gave rings, pour the wine and cut the cake.
However, I was very excited when my sister blew her flowers into the air. Luckily, my mom got it. They came to my table and we cheered together. My dad also came to the stage to sing and dance.That was so fun! I really enjoyed it.

Perhaps the letter is long and I must study now so we must say goodbye. Good night, Alice!
Best wishes,
Lizzy

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